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We open on the giant “Star Wars” logo in space, floating away from the camera. The titles “Episode 2” and “Attack of the Clones” float away before we see our title crawl:

“It is a time of war for the Republic. In an attempt to counter the increasing military power of the Separatists, the Republic has created a grand military force to assist the overwhelmed Jedi Order, who find it difficult to maintain the fragile peace.

The Brave Senator, Padme Jamilia has travelled to Coruscant to vote for the creation of a bill that will restrict the creation and selling of droids meant for military purposes, in an attempt to bring a quick end to this destructive conflict…”

We pan up to the bottom of Coruscant as we see a shiny Nubian starship fly in. We see the inside of the ship where 2 guards talk to the unseen Senator Jamilia.

Guard 1: Senator, we are making our final approach into Coruscant.

Padme: Very good, Lieutenant.

The ship lands on a small landing platform. An unseen female pilot in a tight, sexy outfit along with Padme’s bodyguard, Captain Typho get out of their Alderaan Starfighters. The unseen Pilot has R2-D2 in tow.

Typho: We made it. I guess I was wrong.

Padme, along with her guards, get off the ship when suddenly the ship explodes, killing Padme and her guards. The unseen pilot runs over to the wreckage and takes off her helmet, revealing herself as Padme and revealing the other one to be a decoy.

Padme: Oh no.

Typho: Milady, you’re still in danger here.

Padme: I shouldn’t have come here.

Typho: You know how important this vote is. You did your duty. Corde did hers. Now, come along. Senator Jamillia, please.

We wipe to the chancellor’s office where Palpatine is in a meeting with Padme, Bail Organa and other supporters of this bill.

Palpatine: I understand your concerns, my friends. I want this war to end as much as you all do, but you must understand that the Separatist movement is spreading, if they can’t use a droid army, they’ll simply resort to other methods. Unfortunately, this war will continue, whether we like it or not.

Padme: Well, if the Separatists are willing to kill me to stop this bill, then they clearly want to keep their Droid armies.

Palpatine: How can you be sure it was them? Could’ve been a group of disgruntled Spice miners.

Padme: Miners form unions, they don’t assassinate politicians.

Palpatine: Only one thing is certain. You are in grave danger. May I suggest that you be put under the protection of a bodyguard. A Jedi, perhaps?

Bail: You really think that’s a wise decision under these stressful times?

Padme: Chancellor, if I may comment, I do not think the situa-

Palpatine: -The situation is that serious. I do, Senator. I realise additional security might be disruptive for you. But, perhaps someone you’re familiar with. An old friend like Anakin Skywalker.

Padme: That could be possible.

Palpatine: Do it for me, milady, please. The thought of losing you is unbearable. I shall contact Master Windu over this matter.

We wipe to Padme’s apartment where Anakin and Ahsoka are in the elevator. Ahsoka is not the same girl we last saw her as. She now wears a tight mini-skirt that shows off her sexy orange legs. She also wears a revealing tube-top that shows off an amount of skin that establishes that this is no family film.

Ahsoka: Master, you seem a bit “On edge”.

Anakin: I haven’t seen her in 3 years. I should probably just take a deep breath.

They make it to the floor where Padme is staying. Typho brings them in.

Typho: It’s a pleasure to see you, Master Jedi. Milady is waiting in the living room. I’m Captain Typho of her lady’s security.

They go into the living room. Padme hugs Anakin.

Padme: Ani! I’ve missed you.

She sees Ahsoka.

Padme: Ahsoka, you’ve grown.

Anakin: She certainly has. In terms of age and skill. You’ve grown too. More beautiful…

Padme looks at him for a second.

Anakin: Well, for a Senator.

Padme: Let’s discuss this.

Anakin: Our presence will be invisible. I can assure you.

They sit down across from each other.

Typho: Queen Amidala has been informed of your assignment. I’m grateful you’re here, Master Skywalker. The situation is more dangerous than the Senator will admit.

Padme: I don’t need more security. I need answers. I wanna know who’s trying to kill me.

Anakin: We’re here to protect you, not launch an investigation. We can have Obi-Wan do that for you. But Ahsoka and I will not exceed our mandate.

Padme: Perhaps your presence will be enough to reveal this mystery. Now, if you’ll excuse me. I think I shall retire.

They all get out of their seats.

Typho: I think we’re all better having you here. I’ll have an officer stationed on every floor and I shall be in the control centre, down stairs.

Anakin: Ahsoka. Come with us.

They go downstairs to check the Security.

Anakin: I’m delighted to see her again.

Ahsoka: She didn’t seem to recognize me much.

Anakin: Don’t focus on the negative. That leads to the Darkside, remember. She was pleased to see us. And I’m sure she’ll be perfectly safe under our protection.

We wipe to an assassin named Zam Wessel getting out of her ship. She brings up a hologram of a person.

Zam: I hit the ship but they used a Decoy.

Unseen person: You’ll have to try something more subtle, Zam. I’m becoming impatient.

The voice is distorted so we can’t hear who it is.

Unseen person: No mistakes, this time.

We cut back to Padme’s apartment where Anakin comes into the room where Ahsoka’s waiting for him.

Anakin: Captain Typho has more than enough men downstairs. No assassin would try that way. Any activity up here?

Ahsoka: Quiet as a tomb. I don’t like just waiting here for something to happen.

Anakin: Patience. The assassin will come in time, and when they do, we’ll sense it.

Anakin checks his camera.

Anakin: What’s going on?

Ahsoka: She blocked the cameras so no one would see her.

Anakin: What is she thinking?

Ahsoka: She programmed R2 to warn us if there is an intruder.

Anakin: There are many other ways to kill a Senator.

Ahsoka: I know but we also wanna catch this assassin, don’t we, master?

Anakin: Yes, but that should come, naturally. We can’t use her as bait to draw them out. We’ll catch them by foiling their infiltration.

Ahsoka: It was her idea. Don’t worry Master, No harm will come to her.

Anakin: I hope not. You should care more for her safety. I certainly do.

Ahsoka: Just trust me. I can sense everything going on in that room.

Anakin: It’s still too risky. Besides, your senses aren’t so attuned, my young apprentice.

Ahsoka: And yours are?

Anakin: Possibly.

We see Padme’s handmaiden, Dorme, come into the room with a tray of tea and breakfast.

Anakin: Dorme, what are you doing, up this early?

Dorme: Bringing breakfast for our lady.

Anakin: It’s 5 AM. Besides, she doesn’t want anyone coming into her room right now.

Dorme: It’s okay, you can trust me.

She walks into the room by herself.

Ahsoka: That’s not Dorme.

Anakin: I know.

They come into Padme’s room and get their lightsabers out. Dorme gets 2 guns out and reveals that she was Zam in disguise. Zam jumps out of the window and flies around after firing up her rocket boots.

Anakin: Well, there’s only one solution for this.

Anakin jumps out the window and grabs on to Zam’s leg.

Ahsoka: Stay here!

Ahsoka runs out of Padme’s room as Typho along with the real Dorme come into the room.

Dorme: You alright milady?

We cut to Anakin holding on to Zam’s leg as they fly through the city, trying not to crash into dozens of cars and speeders. Zam flies into the side of a building to make Anakin get off. Ahsoka manages to find a speeder parked outside of Padme’s apartment. She flies it into the air. Zam manages to knock Anakin off her leg before flying to the balcony and getting in her own speeder. Ahsoka sees Anakin falling through the air and lets him land in the speeder.

Anakin: What took you so long?

Ahsoka: The speeders were parked on the bottom floor, outside.

Anakin: Follow that speeder!

Anakin points to Zam’s speeder. She continues following it.

Anakin: Keep on their trail. I have to make a call to an old friend.

Ahsoka continues following the speeder.

Anakin: Yes, hello!

We cut to Obi-Wan in his pyjamas at his apartment building walking through the hallway.

Obi-Wan: Anakin, what could you possibly want at 10 past bloody 5?!

Anakin: Just some assistance with this assassin.

Obi-Wan: Can’t you and Ahsoka handle that?

Anakin: I’m not gonna get too much assistance from a 17 year old. Even one as talented as Ahsoka.

Obi-Wan: Okay! Fine.

Obi-Wan puts his comlink down after finishing his call with Anakin.

Obi-Wan: Can’t even hope to get a good night’s sleep nowadays!

They continue flying through the city before Obi-Wan pulls up in his 4 seat Speeder.

Obi-Wan: Come on. Jump in mine!

Anakin and Ahsoka jump into the speeder, with Ahsoka in the backseat. Anakin uses the force to get the other Speeder into a nearby parking lot.

Anakin: There!

He points to where the Assassin is. Obi-Wan turns the speeder downwards and flies towards Zam’s.

Obi-Wan: This is why I hate flying!

Anakin: Would you like to switch spots?

Obi-Wan: Definitely.

Anakin takes the driver’s seat. They fly down near a few power generators. Zam shoots the power couplings, electrifying it.

Obi-Wan: Anakin! Look out!

Anakin flies through the electrified couplings, electrocuting all of them. They get out of it.

Obi-Wan: Do you want to get us killed?

Anakin: I think I did alright.

Obi-Wan: Just because you’re a knight, doesn’t mean you can do whatever you want.

Anakin: I don’t have to call you master.

Zam flies through a tunnel. Anakin flies another way.

Obi-Wan: Where are you going?

Anakin: Through a shortcut.

Zam comes out of the other end of the tunnel. Anakin stops the speeder.

Obi-Wan: Well we’ve lost them.

Anakin: I don’t think so.

Anakin jumps out of the speeder.

Obi-Wan: Hate it when he does that.

Anakin grabs on to Zam’s speeder. Zam tries to shoot him off. Anakin tries to cut the cockpit open but he accidentally lets go of his lightsaber and it flies into Obi-Wan’s speeder. Anakin tries to wrestle Zam’s Gun out of her hand but accidentally ends up shooting the controls. Anakin jumps off and the Speeder crashes next to a nightclub. Anakin tries to chase Zam through the crowd but he loses her in the chaos. Obi-Wan runs up to him.

Obi-Wan: Anakin!

Anakin: She went into the club, Obi-Wan.

Obi-Wan: They clearly went in to hide, not run. By the way, you dropped this.

He hands Anakin back his lightsaber.

Anakin: Ahsoka. Come with us.

Ahsoka comes into the club with them.

Obi-Wan: Why do I get the feeling you’re going to be the death of me?

Anakin: Don’t say that, master. You like a Father and a brother rolled into one. A bother.

Obi-Wan and Anakin both look at the whole area.

Obi-Wan: Can you see them?

Anakin: I think they’re a she. I also think she’s a changeling.

Obi-Wan: In that case, be extra careful. You two go and find her.

Ahsoka: Where are you going?

Obi-Wan: For a drink.

Anakin and Ahsoka walk around the club for a bit. We see Obi-Wan having a drink at the table. A drug dealer leans over to him.

Drug dealer: You wanna buy some death sticks?

Obi-Wan mind tricks the dealer.

Obi-Wan: You don’t want to sell me death sticks.

Drug dealer: I don’t wanna sell you death sticks.

Obi-Wan: You want to go home and rethink your life.

Drug dealer: I wanna go home and rethink my life.

Zam sees Obi-Wan and thinks up a plan before walking away. We cut back to Anakin and Ahsoka who are still trying to find her. Obi-Wan comes up from behind them.

Obi-Wan: Anakin. I can’t seem to find the assassin. I think we should look somewhere else.

Anakin: Hmm. I still think we haven’t looked properly. For all we know. She could be right behind me.

Obi-Wan: What?

Anakin slashes Obi-Wan in the chest.

Ahsoka: Anakin! What was that?

Anakin: Definitely not Obi-Wan.

The club-goers turn around to see what happened. Obi-Wan runs in.

Obi-Wan: What happened?

Obi-Wan looks at his doppelganger.

Obi-Wan: What the-

Anakin: You see?

The doppelganger Obi-Wan transforms back into Zam.

Anakin: Jedi business. Go back to your drinks.

The club-goers go back to their usual business. They take Zam into a back-alley.

Obi-Wan: Do you know who it was you were trying to kill?

Zam: A senator from Alderaan.

Obi-Wan: And who hired you?

Zam: It was just a job.

Anakin tries to Mind-trick her.

Anakin: You will tell us who hired you.

Zam: I won’t!

Anakin tries again.

Anakin: You will tell us!

Zam spits on Anakin. Zam begins to feel suffocated. She grabs her throat. Anakin looks more angry as she does. Eventually her face starts turning blue.

Obi-Wan: Anakin!

Anakin continues choking her.

Obi-Wan: Anakin! Stop it!

He hits Anakin in the stomach but he doesn’t stop.

Zam: Alright! I’ll tell you.

Anakin stops choking her.

Zam: It was a Bounty Hunter named-

She gets hit in the neck with a dart. She then transforms back into her true, alien form as she dies. Her body then falls to the ground, dead. Obi-Wan picks the dart out of her neck.

Obi-Wan: A toxic dart.

We wipe to the Jedi Temple. We see Obi-Wan and Anakin in discussion with the Jedi council.

Yoda: Track down this Bounty Hunter, you must, Obi-Wan.

Windu: Skywalker and his apprentice will continue guarding Senator Jamilia.

Master Nass: Anakin, you must bring the Queen to her home planet of Alderaan. She’ll be safer there.

Windu: And don’t use registered transport. Travel as Refugees.

Anakin: She’s been working on getting this bill passed for a year. I don’t think she’ll be very willing to leave the capitol.

Yoda: Until this killer is caught, trust our judgement, she must.

Windu: Anakin, discuss this matter with the Chancellor.

Anakin: Yes, master.

We wipe to Anakin in Palpatine’s office.

Palpatine: I will talk with her on this matter. Senator Jamilia will not refuse an executive order. I know her well enough to assure you of that.

Anakin: Thank you, your excellency.

Palpatine: I have said it many times, you are one of the most gifted Jedi I have ever met.

Anakin: Thank you, your excellency.

Palpatine: I feel that your abilities aren’t fully appreciated. The Jedi are rather close-minded in their beliefs. That’s why I left the order.

Anakin: You were a Jedi?

Palpatine: Not exactly. I left before I finished my training.

Anakin: Why did you leave?

Palpatine: The Jedi were very restrictive. I discovered many great things that I was not allowed to practise as they were seen as “Tools of the Dark side”.

Anakin: You know the Dark side?

Palpatine: Anakin, the Jedi think of the force in very “Black-and-white” Terms. What I discovered during my time as a padawan is that there is no “Light and Dark”. There is simply the Force.

Anakin: That’s your opinion. There’s no way of knowing the true nature of the force.

Palpatine: That’s true if you believe in the dogmatic, simple-minded views of the Jedi.

Anakin: The Jedi use their powers for good.

Palpatine: Good is a point of view, Anakin. The Sith and the Jedi are similar in almost every way. Including their quest for greater power.

Anakin: The Sith rely on their passion for their strength. They think inwards, only of themselves.

Palpatine: And the Jedi don’t?

Anakin: The Jedi are selfless. They only care about others.

Palpatine: Use my knowledge, Anakin. If you do, I think that you could become the greatest Jedi ever. Even wiser than master Yoda, and more powerful than master Windu. How does that sound?

We wipe to Obi-Wan walking through the temple with Yoda and Windu.

Obi-Wan: I am concerned for Anakin.

Windu: He has exceptional skills.

Obi-Wan: But his abilities have made him arrogant.

Yoda: Yes. A flaw more and more common among Jedi, I’m afraid. Too sure of themselves, they are. Even the older, more experienced ones.

We wipe to Anakin at an opera house where he meets with Palpatine at one of the performances.

Anakin: You wanted to see me, Chancellor.

Palpatine: Yes, Anakin, come closer, I have something to tell you.

Anakin sits down next to Palpatine.

Palpatine: Leave us.

Palpatine’s entourage leaves their seats.

Palpatine: Anakin, Did you ever hear the tragedy of Darth Plagueis the wise?

Anakin: No.

Palpatine: I thought not. It’s not a story the Jedi would tell you.

Palpatine: Darth Plagueis was a dark lord of the sith, so powerful and so wise that he could manipulate the force to create life. He had such a knowledge of the Dark side. He could even keep himself and others from dying.

Anakin: He could actually save people from death.

Palpatine: The Dark side of the Force is a pathway to many abilities, some consider to be unnatural.

Anakin: What happened to him?

Palpatine: He became so powerful that the only thing he was afraid of was losing his power, which eventually of course, he did. Unfortunately, he taught his apprentice everything he knew and his apprentice killed him in his sleep. It’s ironic. He could save others from death, but not himself.

Anakin: Is it possible to learn this power?

Palpatine: Not from a jedi.

We wipe to Padme’s apartment where Anakin watches as Padme talks to Bail Organa.

Padme: I’m taking an extended leave of absence. It will be your responsibility to take my place in the Senate. Representative Organa, I know I can count on you.

Bail: I’m honoured to take on this Burden, Senator. I accept this with humility and-

Padme: Bail, I don’t wish to hold you up. I’m sure you have a great deal to do.

Bail: Of course, Milady.

Padme walks over to Anakin.

Padme: I don’t like this idea of hiding.

Anakin: Don’t worry. Now that the council has ordered this investigation, it shouldn’t take Obi-Wan long to find who hired this assassin.

Padme: I haven’t worked for a year to pass the military restriction act to not be here when its fate is decided.

Anakin: Well, sometimes we have to let go of our pride and do what is requested of us.

Padme: Anakin, you’ve grown up.

Anakin: Unfortunately, Obi-Wan doesn’t see it. Don’t get me wrong. Obi-Wan was a great mentor. But that doesn’t mean he can still treat me as his apprentice. He says I’m “Too unpredictable”, “Not sensible enough”. “Do this”, “Not that”, “Go here”, “no, not that way”.

Padme: All of our mentors have a way of seeing more of our faults than we would like. It’s the only way we grow.

Anakin: I know. And sometimes I feel the same about Ahsoka.

He watches as Ahsoka uses her force powers to fly an apple around the room before putting it back into her hand and taking a bite out of it.

Anakin: But I hope I don’t keep making Obi-Wan’s mistakes. Eventually she’ll be my equal. I just hope she doesn’t grow up too fast.

We wipe to Anakin, Padme, Typho, Dorme and Obi-Wan flying down in a small, bus-like ship to get on to a larger Refugee ship.

Typho: Be safe, milady.

Padme: Thank you, captain. Take good care of Dorme. The threat is on you two now.

Obi-Wan: I’ll get to the bottom of this plot quickly milady. You’ll be back here in no time.

Padme: I shall be most grateful for your speed, master Jedi.

Anakin: It’s time to go.

Padme: I know.

Obi-Wan: Anakin, may the force be with you.

Anakin: May the force be with you too, Obi-Wan.

Anakin and Padme leave the ship to get on the other ship.

Padme: Suddenly, I feel afraid.

Anakin: Don’t worry. We have R2 with us.

Padme laughs. We cut back to Obi-Wan and Panaka.

Obi-Wan: I hope he doesn’t try anything foolish.

Typho: I’m more concerned about her doing something than him.

The refugee ship takes off. We wipe to Obi-Wan and Ahsoka at a droid factory. We see a young man there named Zet Jucano working on a protocol droid. Another worker comes up to him.

Worker 1: Jucano, someone here to see ya. Jedi, by the looks of it.

Zet pulls his helmet up to see them.

Zet: Ahsoka!

Ahsoka: Hello, Zet.

They walk over to each other and hug. They go and sit on small seats across from one another.

Zet: Long time no see. What brings you out to the Uscru district?

Ahsoka nudges Obi-Wan.

Ahsoka: I think it’d be better if you explained our situation.

Obi-Wan: Ah yes. We’d like to know what this is.

He pulls out the dart from earlier.

Zet: What do you know? I ain’t seen one of these since I worked as a gas miner on Sub Tyrell. Beyond the outer rim.

Ahsoka: Can you tell us where it came from?

Zet: This baby belongs to the cloners. It’s a Kamino Saberdart.

Obi-Wan: That’s funny. It didn’t show up in the analysis archive.

Zet: There are these little cuts on the side that give it away. Those analysis droids only focus on symbols. I would’ve thought that you jedi would have more respect for the difference between knowledge and wisdom.

Ahsoka: Well, if droids could think instead of process, we wouldn’t have this issue.

Obi-Wan: Kamino. I haven’t heard of that one. Is it in the republic?

Zet: No, no, no. It’s beyond the outer rim. I’d say about 10 parsecs outside the Rishi Maze. Should be easy to find. Even for those droids in your archives. These Kaminoans keep to themselves. They’re cloners. And damn good ones too.

Obi-Wan: Are they friendly?

Zet: That depends…

Ahsoka: On what.

Zet: How good your manners are. How big your pocketbook is.

We wipe to Obi-Wan in the Jedi library looking at a statue. The Librarian, Jocasta Nu walks up to him.

Jocasta: Did you call for assistance?

Obi-Wan: Yes, I did.

Jocasta: Are you having a problem, Master Kenobi?

Obi-Wan: Yes. I’m looking for a planetary system called Kamino.

Jocasta: Kamino. It’s not a system I’m familiar with. Are you sure you have the right coordinates?

Obi-Wan: According to my information, it should appear in this quadrant, here. 10 Parsecs from the Rishi Maze.

Obi-Wan points to where the Planet should be. Jocasta enhances the screen.

Jocasta: I hate to say it but it looks like the system you’re searching for doesn’t exist.

Obi-Wan: Impossible, perhaps the archives are incomplete.

Jocasta: We have thousands of researchers and scouts searching the galaxy every single day. So the most likely answer in my mind is that it simply doesn’t exist.

We wipe to the refugee ship Anakin and Padme are staying on. We see that Anakin and Padme are sharing a room. Padme opens her suitcase.

Padme: Anakin, I just need you to turn around.

Anakin: Why?

Padme: Just turn around.

Anakin turns in the other direction, not facing Padme.

Padme: I hope that Queen Amidala can help with this current crisis.

Anakin: Did you dream of power and politics when you were a little girl?

Padme chuckles.

Padme: No! That was the last thing I thought of, but the more history I studied, the more I realised how much good politicians could do. When the Queen asked me to be the Planet’s next ambassador it was an offer I couldn’t refu-

Anakin turns back around to see Padme wearing only her bra and panties. Her body is smoking’ hot. Anakin (Along with the teenage boys in the audience) ogles her stunningly sexy body.

Padme: Turn around!

Anakin continues staring.

Padme: Now!

We cut to Anakin and Padme having lunch at the ship’s cafeteria.

Anakin: But when I got to them, that’s when we went into aggressive negotiations.

Padme: Aggressive negotiations, what’s that?

Anakin: Negotiations with a lightsaber

Padme chuckles.

Padme: Ani, You’ve changed.

Anakin: You haven’t changed a bit. You’re exactly how I remember you, 3 years ago.

They go back to their food. We cut to Padme and Anakin lying next to each other in the ship’s sleeping quarters. Padme shivers.

Padme: Ani… I feel cold.

Anakin begins spooning her before accidentally holding her hand. We wipe to Obi-Wan meeting with Yoda in the Jedi council chambers.

Yoda: Aah, Master Kenobi. Unexpected, your visit is.

Obi-Wan: I’m sorry to disturb you, master.

Yoda: What help can I be, Obi-Wan?

Obi-Wan: I’m looking for a planet described to me by a friend of young Tano’s. I believe them but the planet doesn’t show up in the archive memory.

Yoda: Mmmm. Lost a planet, you have. Erased, it must have been.

Obi-Wan: Yes, but only a Jedi could erase those files. I can’t think of any Jedi who would do such a thing.

Yoda: Mmmm. Show me where the Planet should be, you shall.

Yoda brings a holoprojection of the entire galaxy. Obi-Wan points to where the Planet should be.

Obi-Wan: It ought to be here, but it isn’t. Gravity is pulling all the stars to this spot.

Yoda: Mmmm. Curious, this is. Go to the centre of Gravity’s pull and find your missing planet, you will.

Obi-Wan: Still, I find myself puzzled. Only a Jedi could’ve erased those files.

Yoda: Hmmm. Strange and disturbing, this mystery is. Meditate on this, I will.

Obi-Wan: Thank you, master.

We wipe to Anakin and Padme landing on Alderaan. We see them walking by a fountain.

Padme: When I first saw the Capitol, I was very young, and I’d never even seen a waterfall before. I thought they were so beautiful. I never dreamed that one day, I’d work in the palace.

Anakin: Tell me, did you dream of power and politics when you were a little girl?

Padme: No, that was probably the last thing I thought of.

We see them begin walking up the stairs of the palace.

Padme: When I was relieved of my duties as a bodyguard, the Queen asked me to serve as Senator, And I couldn’t refuse her.

Anakin: I agree with her. I think the Republic needs someone like you. I’m glad that you chose to serve.

We wipe to Anakin and Padme meeting with Queen Amidala and other Alderaan officials.

Padme: If the Senate doesn’t vote to restrict the selling of battle droids, this war is only going to go on.

Queen Amidala interjects.

Amidala: Do you see any way through negotiations to bring the Separatists back into the Republic?

Padme: Not at this point. They already have support from the Trade Federation, I wouldn’t be surprised if they turned to the commerce guilds for help.

An official named Dio Bibble interjects

Bibble: It’s outrageous. Even after 4 trials in the supreme court, Nute Gunray is still the leader of the federation. I fear that the senate will not be able to solve this crisis.

Amidala: We must keep our faith in the Republic.

They get out of their chairs and begin walking away.

Amidala: The day we stop believing democracy can work is the day we lose it.

Padme: Let’s pray that day never comes.

Amidala: In the meantime, we must consider your own safety.

Bibble: What is your suggestion, master Je-

Suddenly an explosion causes a violent shockwave within the building. They all run for cover except Padme and Anakin. Anakin gets out his lightsaber and Padme pulls her blaster out.

Anakin: Padme, protect the interior. I’ll see what’s going on in the exterior. Don’t panic, everybody.

He goes outside and finds a group of Battle Droids blasting at the building. He cuts a few of them down but he runs back inside as they manage to breach the palace. Amidala takes off some of her more cumbersome robes and gathers up her bodyguards to assist Anakin on the front lines. They eventually manage to make the Battle Droids Retreat.

Anakin: We gotta get outta here.

Padme: I can’t Anakin. This is my home.

Anakin: Well, guess what, Padme. Home isn’t safe anymore. We’ll have to rethink our strategy. Come on!

They run out of the room. We wipe to Obi-Wan and Ahsoka’s ships arriving at the Kamino system.

Obi-Wan: Ahsoka.

Ahsoka: Yes, master?

Obi-Wan: I think we’ve found our missing planet.

Ahsoka: You’ve got it, Master.

They fly down to Tipoca city on Kamino and land on a small platform. They come inside from the rainy outside. A tall, long-necked Alien named Taun-We walks up to them.

Taun-We: Master Jedi. The Prime-minister is expecting you.

Both Obi-Wan and Ahsoka are confused/surprised.

Ahsoka: Expecting u-

Obi-Wan nudges Ahsoka.

Ahsoka: Oh, I mean, yes, we know.

Taun-We: And who is this?

Obi-Wan: Ah, this is my apprentice, Ahsoka Tano.

Ahsoka: How do you do?

Obi-Wan: And I am master Obi-Wan Kenobi. May we see the Prime Minister?

Taun-We: Sure. He is very anxious to see you. After all these years we were beginning to think you weren’t coming. This way, please.

Taun-We walks them in the right direction.

Ahsoka: (Whispering) Did you know we were expected?

Obi-Wan: (Whispering) No. I’m just as confused as you are.

They all walk into the prime-minister’s office.

Taun-We: May I present Lama-Su, Prime Minister of Kamino.

Obi-Wan and Ahsoka bow their heads to Lama-Su.

Taun-We: This is master Obi-Wan Kenobi.

Obi-Wan: At your service.

Ahsoka: And his apprentice, Ahsoka Tano, at your service.

Lama-Su: I hope that you will enjoy your stay.

Seats appear from the roof.

Lama-Su: Please. Sit.

Obi-Wan and Ahsoka sit on these seats.

Lama-Su: And now to business. You will be delighted to hear that we are on schedule. 200,000 units are ready with a million more, well on the way.

Obi-Wan: That’s good news.

Lama-Su: Please tell master Sifo-Dyas that his order will be met on time.

Obi-Wan: I’m sorry. Master…?

Lama-Su: Sifo Dyas is still a leading member of the Jedi council. Is he not?

Obi-Wan: Yes. Yes he is.

Lama-Su: Well, then I’m sure he’ll be proud of the army we’ve built for him.

Obi-Wan: The army?

Lama-Su: Yes. A clone army. And I must say, one of the finest we’ve ever created.

Obi-Wan: Tell me Prime Minister, when my master contacted you about the army, did he say who it was for?

Lama-Su: Oh. He didn’t specify that. He simply requested for the army to be built, and that you would come to oversee it. I’m sure you must be anxious to see our Units for yourself.

Obi-Wan: That’s why I’m here.

They get out of their Chairs and begin walking through a large hallway.

Ahsoka: (Whispering) Do you know who Sifo-Dyas is?

Obi-Wan: (Whispering) No, but I think it would be best if we simply played along.

Ahsoka: Okay.

We wipe back to Obi-Wan and Ahsoka being given a tour of the cloning facility.

Obi-Wan: Very impressive.

Lama-Su: I’d hoped you’d be pleased. Clones can think creatively. You’ll find that they are immensely superior to droids. We take great pride in our combat, education and training programs. This group was created about 5 years ago.

Obi-Wan: You mentioned growth acceleration.

Lama-Su: Oh yes. It’s essential. Otherwise, a mature clone would take a lifetime to grow. Now we can do it in half the time.

Obi-Wan: I see.

Lama-Su: They are totally obedient. Taking any order without question. We modified their genetic structure to make them less independent than the original host.

Ahsoka: Who was the original Host?

Lama-Su: A Bounty Hunter who only goes by Doctor Jango.

Obi-Wan: Where is this Bounty Hunter now?

Lama-Su: Oh, we keep him here.

Obi-Wan: Then I would like to meet him.

Lama-Su: I’m sure that can be arranged.

Obi-Wan, Ahsoka, Taun-We and Lama-Su stop at a small balcony and watch the clones practise their marching.

Lama-Su: Magnificent, aren’t they?

We wipe to a lakeside Villa on Naboo where we see Anakin get off a small boat on the shore of the lake. A familiar looking golden protocol droid greets them as they get off their boat.

C-3PO: Welcome! I am C-3PO. Human Cyborg relations, and I shall be happy to serve you both on your stay.

R2-D2 Rolls up to him.

C-3PO: Hello. Who might you be?

R2 beeps at him.

C-3PO: R2-D2? A pleasure to meet you. I am C-3PO, Human Cyborg relations.

We cut to Anakin and Padme walking up the stairs before passing by the Villa’s pool.

Padme: Good thing I brought my bikini.

Anakin and Padme walk over to the balcony looking over the vast landscape of Naboo.

Anakin: We used to come here for School retreat. We would swim to that island every day. I always loved the feeling of being consumed by the vast ocean before feeling that release as you wash up on to the warm sand. We’d lie on the sand and let the sun dry us out, as we tried to guess the names of the birds… singing…

We wipe back to Obi-Wan and Taun-We at Jango’s door entrance. The door opens to reveal Jango is waiting in the door frame.

Jango: Ah, Taun-We. How may I help you?

Taun-We: This is Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi. He’s come to check on our progress.

Obi-Wan: Your clones are very impressive. You must be very proud.

Jango: I’m just a simple man trying to make my way in the universe.

Obi-Wan: Have you ever made it as far into the interior as Coruscant?

Jango: Once or twice.

Obi-Wan: Recently?

Jango: Possibly.

Obi-Wan: Then you must have met Master Sifo Dyas.

Jango: Master Who?

Obi-Wan: Sifo Dyas. Did he not hire you for this job?

Jango: Never heard of him.

Obi-Wan: Really?

Jango: I was recruited by a man named Tyranus on one of the moons of Bogden.

Obi-Wan: Curious.

Jango: Do you like the army?

Obi-Wan: I look forward to seeing them in action.

Jango: They’ll do their job well. I guarantee that.

Obi-Wan: Thank you for your time, Jango.

Jango: Always a pleasure to meet a jedi.

Obi-Wan leaves the room. Jango gets into an elevator after Obi-Wan leaves. We wipe to Padme coming out of the pool in her sexy, blue bikini, in a scene reminiscent of Phoebe Cates in “Fast times at Ridgemont High”. Anakin stares at Padme’s sexy, wet body in rapt silence, with a scene meant to entertain the teenage boys in the audience. Padme pulls her bikini-bottom out of her butt. She sits down next to Anakin.

Anakin: Feels good, doesn’t it?

Padme: Oh yeah. It’s wonderful.

Anakin: Have you ever been in any… romantic relationships?

Padme: I don’t know…

Anakin: Sure you do… you just don’t want to tell me.

Padme: Are you going to use one of your Jedi mind tricks on me?

Anakin: They only work on the weak-minded. You are anything but weak-minded.

Padme: All right… I was twelve. His name was Palo. We were both in the Legislative Youth Program. He was a few years older than I… very cute… dark curly hair… dreamy eyes.

Anakin: All right, I get the picture… whatever happened to him?

Padme: I went into public service. He went on to become an artist.

Anakin: Maybe he was the smart one.

Padme: You really don’t like politicians, do you?

Anakin: I like two or three, but I’m not really sure about one of them.

Padme stares at Anakin. He looks back at her, straight faced, but can’t hold back a smile.

Padme: You’re making fun of me!

Anakin: Oh no, I’d be much too frightened to tease a Senator.

Padme stands up.

Padme: You’re so bad!

Anakin: You’re always so serious.

Anakin stands up.

Padme: I’m so serious?!

Padme pushes Anakin into the pool and laughs. Anakin grabs her foot and pulls her into the pool. The two play-fight in the pool for a bit before climbing out together. They stare at each-other with desire in their eyes. They lean in and kiss each other. Eventually they pull out of it.

Padme: No. We shouldn’t have done that. It’s not professional of either of us.

Anakin: It’s okay Padme. There is no Jedi Council. No Alderaan officials. No Senate. Right here, we can just be with each other. Can’t we?

Padme pulls back in to kiss him. She wraps her arms around him as they continue. We cut to Padme falling backwards onto a bed. Anakin gets on top of her and they roll around on the bed sheets as they kiss. We wipe to them in bed post Coital.

Padme: I still feel strange about this all.

Anakin: Well, look Padme, once this assignment is over, we’ll go back to Coruscant and live out our love there.

Padme sits up.

Padme: I guess you’re right. It’s just, I feel irresponsible. I feel like I’m going behind the back of everyone who I trust.

Padme picks up her bra and puts it back on.

Anakin: I understand. It’s just that I feel a sense of passion I’ve never felt before, and I want to Savour that passion for all it’s worth.

Padme thinks for a moment.

Padme: Okay. We can be together. You just can’t say anything about it until the end of this mission.

Anakin: I promise, milady.

Padme laughs and gets back on to the bed with him and kisses him. We wipe back to Kamino where Obi-Wan and Ahsoka are in Obi-Wan’s bedroom to record a message. The message is seen by Yoda and Master Nass.

Obi-Wan: We have successfully made contact with the prime-minister of Kamino. They are using a Bounty Hunter known as Doctor Jango to create a clone army. I think that this is the clue we need to find out who has been trying to kill Senator Amidala. Anakin has informed me that another attempt was made on her life on Alderaan. They had to transfer to Naboo.

Nass: Do you think that these cloners are involved in the assassination plot?

Obi-Wan: No master. There appears to be no motive.

Yoda: Do not assume anything, Obi-Wan. Clear, your mind must be, if you are to discover the real villains behind this plot.

Obi-Wan: Yes, master. They say that a Jedi named Sifo Dyas placed the request for the army years ago. Do you know of any Jedi by that name?

Yoda: Mmmmm. Know a Sifo Dyas, I do not. Intriguing, this mystery is.

Obi-Wan: Did the council ever place an order for the clone army?

Nass: No. Whoever placed that order did not have the approval of the Jedi Council.

Yoda: Investigate this Bounty Hunter, you must.

Nass: I very much agree. I also believe he is the key to all of this.

Obi-Wan: Yes Master. I will report back when I’ve found who he’s working for.

Yoda: Blinded, we are. The Creation of this army, we could not see.

Nass: I think the Darkside might be diminishing our abilities.

Yoda: Likely, That possibility is.

Nass: Shall we inform the Senate of this?

Yoda: Only the Dark Lord of the Sith could know of our weakness. If we inform the senate, multiply, our adversaries will.

We wipe back to Obi-Wan and Ahsoka, who sneak into Jango’s room at night and go into his mini-elevator. The Elevator takes them down to a room, where from a distance, they can see the Clone Trooper’s armour factory. They walk away from it. Count Dooku and the other Separatist leaders plus Jango and Lama-Su walk past them. Once Obi-Wan and Ahsoka see them, they run and hide.

Dooku: We must persuade the commerce guild and the corporate alliance to sign the treaty.

Gunray: What about the Senator from Naboo? Is she dead yet?

Dooku: I am a man of my word. You will have her head on your desk in less than a week.

Lama-Su: With these new Clones we’ve made for you, You’ll have the finest army in the galaxy.

Obi-Wan and Ahsoka sneak around some more and eavesdrop on a meeting between Dooku and the Separatists.

Dooku: I am quite convinced that 10,000 more systems will rally to our cause with your support, gentlemen.

Another leader, Poggle The Lesser, interjects.

Poggle: Could what you’re proposing be perceived as Treason?

Dooku: Definitely, but it would be a misconstruing of my ultimate intentions.

Poggle: We shall sign then. We have designed a battle station for you. Something with the capacity to wipe out an entire planet.

Dooku: Excellent.

Lama-Su: Our Clone Army is at your disposal, count.

Another Leader named San Hill interjects.

San Hill: The banking Clan will sign your treaty.

Dooku: Excellent. Our friends from the Trade Federation have pledged their support. And when their Battle Droid army combines with your clone army, the Jedi will be overwhelmed. The Republic will agree with any demands we make.

Obi-Wan: We have to inform the Senate of this. Get the Holo-Projector.

Ahsoka: Right away, master.

We wipe to Anakin and Padme in bed, making out. R2-D2 rolls in, ruining their intimacy

Padme: R2. What are you doing here?

R2 beeps.

C-3PO: He says he has a message from an “Obi-Wan Kenobi”. Would you know of anyone by that name?

Anakin: Obi-Wan?

We wipe to Anakin and Padme on the ship, watching a recording from Obi-Wan on Kamino.

Obi-Wan: Anakin, my long-range transmitter has been knocked out. Re-transmit this message to the Senate and Jedi Council.

Padme presses a button which retransmits the message to the Jedi Council chamber along with Palpatine’s office.

Obi-Wan: I have tracked the origin of a weapon used in the attempted assassination of Senator Amidala, to a cloning facility on the Planet of Kamino. The planet doesn’t appear in the archives. It is 10 parsecs outside the Rishi Maze. The Separatists are to take delivery of this army, along with their own droid army. It is clear that Count Dooku and Nute Gunray are behind the assassination. The commerce guilds and the corporate alliance have pledged their allegiance to Count Dooku and are forming a- Wait!

Obi-Wan pulls out his lightsaber as the sound of blaster fire fills the recording.

Yoda: More, I feel, is happening on Kamino than what we have been informed of.

Master Nass: I agree. Anakin…

We cut back to Anakin on the ship, with master Nass now being broadcast as a hologram.

Nass: We will deal with Count Dooku. You must stay on Naboo and protect the Senator.

Anakin: I will, my master.

The hologram turns off.

Padme: They’ll never get there in time. The Rishi Maze is less than a lightyear from here.

Anakin: I’ve been ordered to stay with you. Besides, how do we know if he’s still alive?

Padme: We’d have to find out. He’s your mentor, you’re brother, you-

Anakin: My father. The only father I have left. But I have strict orders from Master Nass.

Padme: He gave you strict orders to protect me. And I’m going to protect Obi-Wan.

She turns on the ignition and the ship goes up in the air.

Padme: If you wanna protect me, you’ll just have to put up with it.

Anakin: If you insist… milady.

R2 beeps.

C-3PO: It’s not that I’m worried, R2. I’ve just never flown before.

The ship blasts off into space. We wipe back to Kamino where we see Obi-Wan stuck in a suspended position above the floor as part of his imprisonment. Count Dooku walks into the room.

Obi-Wan: Traitor.

Dooku: Oh, no, my friend. This is a mistake.

Obi-Wan: I thought you were the leader here, My old master.

Dooku: This had nothing to do with me, my old Padawan, I assure you. I will petition immediately to have you set free.

Obi-Wan: Well, I hope it doesn’t take too long. I have work to do.

Dooku: May I ask you, Obi-Wan, why a talented Jedi Knight like yourself is all the way out here on Kamino?

Obi-Wan: If you must know why, I’ve been tracking who put out the hit on Senator Jamilia. I appear to have found the culprit, old master.

Dooku: I can assure you, My actions have nothing to do with the Senator. That was Viceroy Gunray’s doing.

Obi-Wan: Why didn’t you just hire your friend, Jango?

Dooku: Oh, but we did. But he outsourced it to one of his underworld colleagues. I don’t trust him, anyway.

Obi-Wan: Why not? He appears to have the same moral values as you.

Dooku: Don’t get me wrong, I have a great deal of respect for Bounty Hunters and assassins and the like. But talented Scum is still Scum. It is a great pity I was never able to finish your training. You were the most talented pupil I ever had.

Obi-Wan: Well, you have no one to blame but yourself in that regard. You left the order and the republic.

Dooku: Well, you could’ve followed me, and together we could’ve become the most powerful Jedis ever. I could use your help right now.

Obi-Wan: I didn’t need you. Yoda and master Nass were better mentors then you could’ve dreamed of being. I’ll never join you.

Dooku: Don’t be so sure, my young padawan. I taught you all about the corruption in the senate. You wouldn’t be going along with it if you had learned the truth as I have.

Obi-Wan: What truth?

Dooku: That the Republic is under the control of the Dark Lord of the sith.

Obi-Wan: No, the Jedi would sense it.

Dooku: That is where you are wrong. I can see through the corruption and short sightedness of Master Windu, Nass and even Yoda, my old master. And if you followed my teachings, you could see through it too. Hundreds of Senators, including the supreme chancellor are being manipulated by a Sith Lord called Darth Sidious.

Obi-Wan: Why should I believe you?

Dooku: I was once in league with Darth Sidious. He came to me for help, he told me everything. But he betrayed me. You must Join me, Obi-Wan. Together we can destroy both the Jedi and the Sith! And create a new league of force users.

Obi-Wan: I’m sorry master, but I must decline your offering.

Dooku: Well, then that is your choice. And as such, you shall be executed.

We wipe to Padme’s ship flying towards Kamino. It enters the atmosphere before flying down to the Planet surface. They then fly down to a small landing platform at the top of a large column. It then descends into the column which leads them down to a small tunnel, underwater. We see the inside of the cockpit

Padme: Look, whatever happens out there, follow my lead. I’m not interested in getting into a war here.

Anakin: If you say so, milady.

They get off the ship. R2 and 3PO stay behind. R2 beeps at C-3PO.

C-3PO: My obtuse little friend, if they needed our help, they would’ve asked for it. You obviously have a great deal to learn about human behaviour.

R2 beeps. Anakin and Padme walk through a cavernous tunnel. We cut back to R2 beeping at C-3PO

C-3PO: For a mechanic, you seem to do an excessive amount of thinking.

R2 beeps at him.

C-3PO: I’m programmed to understand humans. I am an etiquette droid.

R2 beeps at him.

C-3PO: “What does that mean?” It means I’m in charge here!

R2 begins rolling away.

C-3PO: Where are you going? You don’t know what’s out there! Have you no sense at all? You malfunctioning idiot!

3PO follows R2 off the ship.

C-3PO: Please wait! Do you know where you’re going?

We cut back to Anakin and Padme walking through the tunnel.

Padme: Anakin, I have a bad feeling about this.

Anakin: Wait!

Clone commander: Fire!

Suddenly the clones pop out of the walls to attack Anakin and Padme. Anakin tries to deflect their blaster fire but it isn’t worth it, and they overwhelm him to the point where he simply runs away. R2 and 3PO follow them. They open a door with an extending platform under it, but the platform de-extends and Padme, Anakin and 3PO fall off. 3PO falls onto a conveyor belt.

C-3PO: Master Anakin! Help me!

He’s taken away by the conveyor.

Anakin and Padme land on a small platform where they’re surrounded by clone troopers led by Jango.

Jango: Don’t move Jedi! Take him away!

We wipe to Anakin and Padme being taken into the Separatist conference room to meet Count Dooku.

Padme: You’re holding a jedi and a Padawan. Obi-Wan Kenobi and master Skywalker’s apprentice, Ahsoka Tano. We formally request they be handed over to us.

Dooku: We do not recognise the Republic here, Senator. But if Alderaan were to join our alliance, I could easily hear your plea for clemency.

Padme: And if I don’t join your little rebellion?

Dooku: The republic can not be fixed, my lady. It is time to start over.

Padme: I know of your treaties with the commerce guilds and your continuing alliance with Nute Gunray and the trade federation. Even if the republic was unsalvageable, you’d still be nothing but a group of greedy, callous war profiteers. I’ll never betray the republic.

Dooku: Well then, if that’s your choice. I’m afraid you must be terminated. Take her away.

We wipe to Anakin and Padme in small carts to be taken to their execution.

Padme: Don’t be afraid.

Anakin: I’m not afraid to die. If I die, I’ll become a part of the force like my family. If I survive, we’ll be able to live out a happy life together.

Padme: What if I die?

Anakin: I know you won’t. The force is telling me you won’t. Will you marry me?

Padme: I will.

Anakin: If this doesn’t break into war, I’ll leave the order, and we can be happily married on Naboo, Alderaan or even Coruscant.

Padme: If we don’t make it, then this is your chance to kiss the bride.

They lean in and kiss before being carted out into a large arena, exposed to the heavy rain and violent ocean as the spectators stay protected in a massive bubble. Anakin and Padme are taken off their cart and chained to 2 large pillars, which sit beside another 2 pillars where Obi-Wan and Ahsoka are chained.

Ahsoka: Master Anakin? Senator Padme?

Obi-Wan: Ah yes. We were beginning to wonder if you’d got my message.

Anakin: I retransmitted it just as you requested. Then we decided to come and rescue you.

Obi-Wan: Good job.

Dooku, Gunray, Jango and Lama Su appear in their private box.

Lama-Su: The felons before you have been convicted of espionage against the Sovereign System of Kamino. Their sentence of death is to be carried out in this public arena henceforth!

Dooku: Let the executions begin!

4 large monsters suddenly emerge from the caves. Padme manages to lockpick her way out of her chains.

Obi-Wan: This will all be over soon if we just relax and concentrate on our surroundings.

Anakin: What about Padme?

Obi-Wan: She seems to be on top of things.

Padme manages to get to the top of the pillar. The monster intended for Obi-Wan digs its claw into the pillar and accidentally breaks Obi-Wan out of his chains.

Ahsoka: (Whispering) Master? Do you have a plan of attack?

Anakin: (Whispering) As a matter of fact, I do. I just need to wait for a certain someone.

The monster intended for Anakin smashes into the pillar. But as it does, Anakin jumps on top of the monster and accidentally pulls the chain too hard which makes it break. Anakin uses a jedi mind trick to control the beast. Padme manages to fend off the beast meant for her, but it manages to claw her in the back, exposing her sexy midriff. Nute Gunray looks on happily. Meanwhile, R2-D2 rolls into the audience as Anakin is riding the monster. In a moment reminiscent of the scene on the Sail Barge in Return of the Jedi, R2 ejects a lightsaber from his interior into Anakin’s hand, which he uses to cut his chain before jumping off.

Ahsoka: Where did you get that?

Anakin: I always keep a spare.

Meanwhile, Padme continues to fend off the monster before jumping off the pillar, swinging on the chain and kicking the monster off the pillar.

Gunray: She can’t do that! Shoot her or something!

Anakin mind-tricks his beast into going over to Padme and helping her get down from the pillar. Padme rides the beast around but accidentally falls onto the slippery arena surface. Anakin manages to break Ahsoka out of her chains.

Gunray: This isn’t how it’s supposed to be! Jango, finish her off!

Dooku: Patience, Viceroy, she will die.

Clone troopers surround our 4 heroes. Suddenly, Mace Windu appears behind the Viceroy.

Dooku: Master Windu, how pleasant of you to join us.

Windu: This party’s over.

Suddenly, a huge amount of Jedi show up from the Audience.

Dooku: Brave, but foolish, my old friend. You’re impossibly outnumbered

Windu: I don’t think so.

Dooku: We shall see.

Suddenly, Clone troopers begin shooting at Windu. Windu then jumps into the arena. A Jedi throws 2 lightsabers for Obi-Wan and Ahsoka to use. Amid the swarms of Droids marching into the arena, a Battle droid with C-3PO’s body appears.

3PO-Battle Droid Hybrid: My legs aren’t moving, I need maintenance.

A fierce battle breaks out between the Jedi and the 2 Separatist armies. Another battalion comes out including C-3PO, whose head appears to have been fitted on a Battle Droid’s body.

C-3PO: What’s all this noise? A battle? There’s been a terrible mistake! I’ve been programmed for etiquette, not destruction!

The Battle droid with C-3PO’s body has his head shot off.

Dooku: Jango, I think it is your time to demonstrate your talents.

Jango: With pleasure.

Jango flies down and begins shooting down unsuspecting Jedi. One of the monsters lunges at Obi-Wan who gets out of the way, leaving Jango in the way of the monster. The monster drags him around. He manages to get up, but Obi-Wan lunges at him. Jango shoots at him but Obi-Wan deflects his blaster fire, so Jango begins firing up his jetpack, but it malfunctions so he flies up into the air without his control. As he tries to regain control, a large bird monster flies into him and knocks him into the ocean. We cut to C-3PO as he begins shooting at Jedis.

C-3PO: Die! Jedi Dogs! Oh! What am I saying?

One Jedi runs into C-3PO on the Battle Droid body.

C-3PO: Oh dear! I’m terribly sorry about all this.

The Jedi knocks C-3PO over with the force. The body of a dead clone trooper falls on top of him.

C-3PO: Excuse me, I’m trapped. I can’t get up.

We cut to Anakin and Padme.

Anakin: You call this a diplomatic solution?

Padme: No, I call it aggressive negotiations.

R2 rolls up to 3PO, still trapped under the dead clone trooper.

C-3PO: R2-D2? What are you doing here?

R2 beeps at him. R2 extends a magnetic tow-cable to 3PO’s neck. He tries to pull 3PO’s head off.

C-3PO: Ow! You’re going to strain something. My neck.

R2 pulls 3PO’s head off before dragging it through the arena.

C-3PO: Oh, this is such a drag!

R2 drags 3PO’s head over to the rest of his disconnected body.

C-3PO: Oh, I’m quite beside myself.

R2 manages to reattach 3PO’s head to the rest of his body. He seals it using his electrical capabilities.

C-3PO: Careful! You’re singeing my circuits!

R2 manages to seal it. All of the droid and clone units stop firing as they have the Jedi surrounded.

Dooku: Master Windu, you have fought gallantly. Worthy of recognition in the Jedi archives. But now, it is finished. Surrender, and your lives will be spared.

Windu: We will not be hostages for you to barter, Dooku!

Dooku: Then, I’m sorry old friend.

The clones and droids point their weapons back at the Jedi. Padme looks at the sky.

Padme: Look!

4 republic command ships appear. We see the main one being led by master Nass, who leads a battalion of stormtroopers.

Master Nass: Create a perimeter around the survivors!

The Jedis get on their gunships. We cut back to R2 and 3PO. 3PO manages to sit upright

C-3PO: I’ve just had the most peculiar dream.

We cut to Dooku in the conference room with Gunray and Rune.

Gunray: The Jedi have amassed an entire army!

Dooku: That doesn’t seem possible. How could the Jedi have come up with an army so quickly?

Gunray: We must send all available troops into battle!

Dooku: There are too many.

Rune Haako: Our communications have been jammed.

We cut to the Republic gunships.

Master Nass: If Dooku escapes, he will rally more systems to his cause!

We cut to the gunship where Ahsoka, Anakin and Padme are.

Ahsoka: Aim right above the fuel cells!

They shoot at the fuel cells which causes them to crash onto the ground

Anakin: Good call, my young padawan.

We cut back to Dooku, Gunray and Rune Haako in the conference room.

Dooku: This is not looking good at all.

Gunray: We must order a retreat! The Jedi must not find our design for the ultimate weapon!

Gunray turns a holoprojector showing the Death Star plans off.

Gunray: If they find what we are planning to build, we’re doomed!

He gives a disk containing the plans to Dooku.

Dooku: I shall take these plans with me to Coruscant! They will be much safer there.

We cut to a gunship containing Windu, Nass and Obi-Wan.

Windu: Pilots! Land in that assembly area!

Stormtrooper pilot 1: Yes sir!

They land in a small assembly area. Windu is greeted by a small stormtrooper battalion.

Stormtrooper commander: Sir! I have five special commando units awaiting your orders, sir.

Mater Nass: Take me to the forward command centre!

They fly Nass away. We cut to Anakin, Ahsoka and Padme’s ship.

Anakin: Attack those Federation starships, quickly!

We cut to Nass in the command centre.

Stormtrooper 1: Master Nass, all forward positions are advancing.

Master Nass: Very good, troops.

Obi-Wan: Master, shall I stay with you?

Master Nass: No, Obi-Wan, you must catch Dooku and end this war right now.

Obi-Wan: It will be done, master.

Obi-Wan flies off in the command ship. We cut to Dooku preparing to escape. Suddenly, Obi-Wan runs in

Dooku: Obi-Wan! Such a pleasant surprise!

Obi-Wan: I’m afraid that’s master Kenobi to you, Count. You’re going to pay for all the Jedi you’ve killed today.

Dooku: I’m afraid my Jedi powers are far beyond yours. Now, back down, my old Padawan.

Dooku shoots lightning at Obi-Wan, which he quickly deflects.

Obi-Wan: I don’t think so. We’re not in the Jedi temple anymore.

Dooku gets his lightsaber out. The two begin duelling. They break out of their duel for a second.

Dooku: Master Kenobi, you disappoint me. Yoda holds you in such high esteem, but it seems that all I taught you didn’t matter.

They continue duelling.

Dooku: Surely, you can do better!

They continue duelling. They manage to interlock sabers before Dooku incapacitates Obi-Wan by stabbing him in the arm and hip. We cut to master Nass who is still watching over the battle.

Stormtrooper commander: The droid army is in full retreat.

Master Nass: Well done commander. Bring me a ship.

We cut back to Dooku who is about to fly away.

Dooku: Fire up the engines!

His pilot fires up the engine, but the ship doesn’t move.

Dooku: What’s happened? Why isn’t the ship moving?

Pilot: I do not know what is happening. It should be moving.

Dooku: I sense some form of treachery!

Dooku leaves his ship, only to find Master Nass holding it in place with the force.

Dooku: Master Nass!

Master Nass: Count Dooku!

Dooku: You have interfered with our affairs for the last time!

They begin throwing objects back and forth at each other with the force. Dooku tries to make the roof fall on Nass, but Nass reflects it.

Master Nass: You have become powerful, Dooku. But I sense the Dark side controlling you.

Dooku: I have become more powerful than any Jedi, even Yoda.

Dooku disconnects a pillar and holds it above Obi-Wan’s unconscious body, about to drop it. Nass holds it in the air as Dooku tries to escape in his ship, but Nass throws it at the ship just as Anakin, Padme and Ahsoka run in. Dooku walks out of the wreckage to find himself surrounded. We wipe to Padme’s ship flying back to Coruscant. They land on a small platform before exiting with the captured Dooku. We wipe to the Senate building where we see Windu addressing the senate.

Windu: …it was then that we discovered Dooku was carrying a design for a space station known as a “Death Star”. A station with enough firepower to destroy an entire planet. We thought it was the safest option to destroy these plans so that it cannot be used by either the Seperatists or the Republic.

The senate audience claps. The Chancellor steps up.

Palpatine: Thank you, Master Windu. Unfortunately however, this does not mean that the war is over. Dooku’s apprentice, Darth Maul, escaped before the Jedi could capture him, meaning he is now the leader of the droid and clone armies. However, with our growing military power, we should hopefully be able to end this war in about 3 or so years.

The Senate claps once again. We cut to Palpatine’s office.

Chancellor’s bodyguard: Chancellor?

Palpatine: Yes?

Chancellor’s Bodyguard: Count Dooku has been brought to see you.

Palpatine: Let him in.

Dooku walks in.

Palpatine: Guards, leave us.

The guards leave the room.

Palpatine: You have done well, Dooku.

Dooku: Thank you, my lord.

Palpatine: What of the plans for the ultimate weapon?

Dooku: Lord Maul has his own copy of the design. It will be sent to you in time.

Palpatine: Good. Soon the Jedi will be extinct, and we will rule this galaxy together, my apprentice.

Dooku: Thank you, Lord Sidious.

Sidious cackles to himself.

We wipe to a montage of stormtroopers marching up and down before being put on Star Destroyers and sent to war. We see a group of Senators watching this from a balcony. We then wipe to Padme and Anakin’s wedding, where Yoda reads the vows.

Yoda: Padme Amidala, Take Anakin Skywalker as your lawfully wedded husband, do you?

Padme: I do.

Yoda: And, Anakin Skywalker, Take Padme as your lawfully wedded wife, do you?

Anakin: I do.

Yoda: Support each other, in sickness and health will you?

Padme: I will.

Anakin: I will.

Yoda: Love and Cherish each other, until parted, you are by the force, will you?

Anakin: I will.

Padme: I will.

Yoda: Kiss the bride, you can.

Anakin and Padme kiss. The attendees (including the Jedi Council, a few Senators and Padme’s parents) clap. The movie ends.

This is a fun, ambitious rewrite of Attack of the Clones! It’s significantly longer and incorporates many elements not present in the original film. However, to make it truly shine as a senior story writer’s work, some adjustments are needed:

Areas for Improvement:

  • Pacing and Focus: The story is incredibly dense. Many subplots (Zam Wessel’s assassination attempts, Obi-Wan’s investigation of Kamino, the romance between Anakin and Padme, the political maneuvering) are interwoven without enough breathing room. Prioritizing a few key storylines and streamlining the others would improve readability and impact. For instance, the extended nightclub scene could be condensed.

  • Character Development: While the changes add spice, some characterizations feel inconsistent or out of character. Ahsoka’s sudden transformation into a more mature and overtly sexualized character lacks subtlety. Anakin’s arrogance is present, but it could be more nuanced, showing his inner conflict rather than simply portraying him as reckless. Similarly, Padme’s decisiveness feels rushed.

  • Plot Holes and Inconsistencies: Several plot points need clarification. For example, how does Padme’s decoy work? The sudden appearance of a massive Jedi force on Kamino feels contrived. The motivations of some characters, especially the Kaminoans, could be explored further. The use of mind tricks is over-reliant, sometimes weakening the tension.

  • Dialogue: Some dialogue feels unnatural or overly expositional. Show, don’t tell. Let the action and interactions reveal the story rather than relying heavily on characters explicitly stating information.

  • Tone: The story blends serious political intrigue with slapstick comedy (C-3PO’s antics) and explicit sexual content (Ahsoka’s attire, Anakin and Padme’s intimacy). Finding a consistent tone is crucial to engage the reader. The current mix can feel jarring.

  • Ending: The ending feels rushed. The final battle on Kamino lacks the dramatic tension it could possess. The resolution of the Death Star plans feels anticlimactic, particularly given its significance in the overall Star Wars saga.

Suggestions for Revision:

  1. Choose a Focal Point: Decide which storyline should be the primary focus. Is it the assassination attempt, the discovery of the clone army, or Anakin and Padme’s romance? Develop that storyline more fully and trim the others to support it.

  2. Develop Character Arcs: Give the characters more depth. Show their internal struggles and motivations. Avoid sudden, unexplained shifts in personality. For example, Ahsoka’s development should be gradual and believable.

  3. Strengthen the Plot: Address the plot holes and inconsistencies. Ensure all events are logically connected and motivated. The Kamino sequence needs a stronger sense of suspense and discovery.

  4. Refine the Dialogue: Make the dialogue more natural and revealing. Use subtext and implication to convey information rather than relying on exposition.

  5. Establish a Consistent Tone: Decide on the overall tone (serious drama, action-adventure, dark comedy) and maintain it throughout the story.

  6. Elevate the Climax: The final battle on Kamino needs more dramatic weight. Raise the stakes, increase the tension, and provide a satisfying resolution.

By addressing these points, you can transform this ambitious rewrite into a truly compelling and polished story worthy of a senior story writer’s portfolio. The core ideas are excellent, but careful refinement is needed to fully realize their potential.

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